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Journalistic
Writing MCM310
VU
LECTURE
18
STYLE:
GUIDELINE AND PITFALLS I
Proper
words in proper places.
(Swift)
Thinking
out into language. (Cardinal
Newman)
To
have something to say and
say it as clearly as you
can. (Arnold)
How
to Convey a Good Message
(Do's of style)
1.
Omit needless words
2.
Be sparing with adjectives,
but lavish with
verbs
3.
Beware of your special
words
4.
Do not overstate
5.
Remember your
signposts
STYLE
PITFALLS (DON'TS OF
STYLE:
COLLOQUIALISM:
This
can best be described as
"writing in the way that one
would speak."
1.
Avoid using "filler"
words.
The
following are overused
fillers:
Basically
At best, it can be used to begin a
sentence, but there are
better choices available to replace the
word,
if
it is not omitted entirely.
E.g. "A microphone is basically
a
device that is used to
record sound."
Even
Often, this word is found as an
"additive" to a series, as in the
following example, but is
generally not
needed.
E.g. "The basket contained
eggs, sandwiches, and
even
utensils."
Just
When used in the same
context as BASICALLY, this is another
overused filler word that
one should
omit.
E.g.
"When pouring the solution, just be
certain, not to, spill its
contents."
Well
Generally used to begin a sentence
following a question. E.g.
"Why is this problem? Well,
one major
issue
is the..."
2.
Avoid contractions.
Replace
can't
with
cannot,
doesn't
with
does
not, and
so on. For example, instead
of writing "Therefore,
this
can't be used as evidence in the
case", write "Therefore, this
cannot
be
used as evidence in the
case."
3.
Limit your use of subjective
pronouns.
Use
3rd person perspective.
Don't use 1st or 2nd
person pronouns like "I",
"Me", "You" and
"We".
4.
Avoid splitting infinitives.
For
example: He tried to not
sneeze (not to sneeze) in the
library.
5.
Avoid ending your sentences with a
preposition.
Before:
"What is the bag filled
with?"
After:
"What is inside the
bag?
6.
Avoid stage
directions.
Do
not commence by telling the
reader what you are doing,
or begin an essay by telling the
reader
what
the paper will
discuss.
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"I
am writing to you to ask you
to..."
"This
paper is going to talk about
how..."
7.
Avoid vague
words.
Vague
words can be described as
words that are open to
interpretation or that don't
express your ideas
as
well as more precise words
would.
There
are a
few ways
to solve the equation.
She
made enough
food.
COLLOQUIAL
VS FORMAL:
FORMAL
FORMAL
COLLOQUIAL
COLLOQUIAL
Do
you have...
several
Do
you got...
a
lot
going
to, want to
is
not
gonna,
wanna
ain't
type
of
all
right
kinda,
kind of
alright
It
is, as if, he
never
anyway
It
is like he...
anyways
existed.
could
have
could
of
pretty
would
of
would
have
very
real
/ really
should
of
should
have
very
hot
sorta,
sort of
Get
it.
Understand.
similar
to
CIRCUMLOCUTION:
The
use of many words where few
would do. Circumlocution
is a
figure of speech
where
the meaning of a word or phrase is
indirectly expressed through
several or many words. Its
antonym is
brevity
and conciseness.
Usually
everywhere politicians and government
officials adopt this circumlocution
.e.g. the traditional red
tape.
1.
Before: The
minister will cause inquires to be
instituted with a view to
ascertaining the views of the
general
public upon the subject of
national dietary standards.
After:
The
Minister will find out what
people think about the national
diet.
2.
Before: All things
considered,
it
seems like the
new tax cut imposed by the administration
will
without
a doubt make
the wealthy wealthier and the poor
poorer. When
the administration's new
tax
cut is passed, the
children living in poverty
will be affected the
worst.
After:
The
new tax cut imposed by the administration
will undoubtedly make the wealthy
wealthier
and
the poor poorer. Consequently,
children living in poverty
will be severely
affected.
3.
Before: High-quality
learning environments are a necessary
precondition for facilitation
and
enhancement
of the ongoing learning process.
After:
Children
need good schools if they
are to learn
properly.
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